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Astoria Greengrass ([info]ttw_astoria) wrote,
@ 2009-06-12 13:06:00

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029
I can't believe I'm doing this. Why am I doing this? No, really, why am I doing this?

It had been a game for him. A game he had every intent on winning. Why couldn't I see that before?

Raven hair fell before her eyes as the scene before her was played out. She had all trust in her sister to win the spar. Never once had she given thought to the idea that Lora could lose. It was as the last blow was struck and Lora lay broken and bleeding on the ground, that Desdemona knew her very life was going to change.

Granite orbs looked upon the man in the center of the arena. He was beautiful to say the least. With each step he took, muscles rippled below the surface of pale skin. His hair, long and blond by nature now hung limp and wet about his shoulders. It was his eyes, turquoise, that held the dark promise of what was to come. And with that, a gasp filled her lungs with dread.

His steps brought him ever closer, each footfall a lifetime to her. Each beat of her heart, a precious reminder that her life was now forfeit. He came to stand before her, blood-sweat upon his chest in the flicker of firelight. "Desdemona," He voice a seductive whisper. "It's time." He held a hand out to her, knowing she was to proud to run.

With one last look of desperation towards the figure on the ground behind him, she raised a delicate hand and placed it within the palm of his. There were no words spoken from anyone in the room as he enveloped her in an intimate hug. His fingers lifted her chin so their eyes would meet. Grey met blue-green, offering up more than just her mortal soul. He kissed her then, warmth flooded her limbs and the beat of her heart pulsed against the vein in her neck.

When his lips left hers, an inaudible whimper was issued forth as she trembled as though from cold. He turned her then, so she would be facing her wounded sister and the man that now helped her to her feet. The look in those emerald eyes was of pure hatred for the man that held her sister captive. Hatred and helplessness. Desdemona would have spoken out, given a word to still the pain her sister felt had there been time.

He tilted her head to the side, long supple fingers stroked the satin column of her throat. Her eyes fluttered shut in anticipation of what would come next. A whisper of motion behind her was all that was felt before the soft tissue was pierced. She gasped in pain, sought to cry out, to push him away, but he held tight to her and bit down harder.

Her body grew colder with every second that went by. Her vision faded away and finally the arrhythmic beating of her heart slowed to a stop. Warm liquid was poured down her throat, restoring life where life had vanished. Ravenous, she lifted her hands and held tight to the life giving source. "Drink your fill my Angel." The words floated in through the fog clouding her mind as her body sought the source of her hunger.

It was long moments later, that her hands fell away from the limb and her eyes could open. Grey eyes, near silver, looked upon the world with a sense of wonder. Her tongue flicked out to lick at swollen lips and grazed against the fine points of her newly formed fangs.

She fell to the ground, screaming as the demonic blood began to course through dead tissue, bringing her back to life. There was nothing anyone could do to ease her suffering. Lora was held back by the strong arms of the man who loved her. Both looked on in horror, remembering their own turning to the shadow world. Maleck, a cruel smile tugging at the corner of his mouth waited until her convulsion like tremors began to lessen, before he sat down at her side and dragged her limp body onto his lap. Whispered words of love and promise were rained upon her.

When she could finally muster the strength to open her eyes, she looked upon her make. No longer was he the blond haired, blue eyed man she had been changed by. He looked down upon her with crimson eyes, ebony strands of hair falling into the penetrating gaze. Her fate was then sealed with two words. "You're mine."

Its official, I've gone insane.


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[info]ttw_cornfoot
2009-06-12 04:32 pm UTC (link)
One of your short stories?
It's very...atmoshperic. I like it.

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[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-12 04:36 pm UTC (link)
I don't like it.

I have found so many faults with it since I wrote it in here.

It is one of them...

...I can't believe I wrote it for everyone to see. I don't do that.

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[info]ttw_cornfoot
2009-06-12 04:41 pm UTC (link)
I know you don't - but it's good.
maybe it's not such a bad thing?

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[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-12 04:46 pm UTC (link)
Its not good, you're just saying that.

What's not a bad thing? Having the world read it? I think I'm going to hide my head for a few days. I don't like people reading my things. I can't believe I once fanicied I'd maybe attempt my hand at writing when I can't stand to have my stuff viewed by the public!

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[info]ttw_cornfoot
2009-06-12 04:51 pm UTC (link)
I'm not just saying it - promise!

And I don't think you should - at this rate you'll be becoming a writer in no time! You'll be grabbed by someone!

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[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-12 04:56 pm UTC (link)
I doubt anyone would read my stuff. Its not that catching. I mean you can't tell me you want to know what happens next. Or even what lead up to this moment.

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[info]ttw_cornfoot
2009-06-12 05:10 pm UTC (link)
It doesn't detract from what's there being good.

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[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-12 05:20 pm UTC (link)
No, but it doesn't keep the reader's attention, and thus isn't interesting enough to - as you said - grab someone.

Though I am flattered you said I'm that good!

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[info]ttw_cornfoot
2009-06-12 05:23 pm UTC (link)
It kept my attention, and thus, your argument it void.
Honestly, I liked it.

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[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-12 05:26 pm UTC (link)
And this is why I love ♥ you.

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[info]ttw_creevey
2009-06-12 05:26 pm UTC (link)
That was ... nice Astoria.

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Dennis
[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-12 05:28 pm UTC (link)
Haha! Not something you'd think I'd write?

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Astoria
[info]ttw_creevey
2009-06-12 05:28 pm UTC (link)
No. Well, I don't know you well enough to know what you'd write.

I guess it was a little disturbing. Not the writing, I mean just the content.

I don't understand why, and, yeah. But it was good.

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Dennis
[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-12 05:38 pm UTC (link)
I get inspired by the weirdest of things. The character, Desdemona, is a character I've written about before. This was just another chapter into her life. I guess.

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Astoria
[info]ttw_pucey
2009-06-12 08:44 pm UTC (link)
It's a jarring start, picking up in the middle of the story. But much better than anything I expected you to write.

That's not to say it's good.

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Pucey
[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-12 08:50 pm UTC (link)
Yeah I figured you'd say as much. Actually, that was alot better than I thought you'd say.

Its a shame it's not good. You might have liked it better before I had to alter the antagonist's name.

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Astoria
[info]ttw_pucey
2009-06-12 08:51 pm UTC (link)
Oh? What was his name before?

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Pucey
[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-12 09:10 pm UTC (link)
Ironically, his name had started out as Adrian. Adrian Windsor. Half demon, immortal, soul stealer.

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Astoria
[info]ttw_pucey
2009-06-12 09:13 pm UTC (link)
Well. Your main character's name is a tad bit cliche then, don't you think?

But I think you should have kept him as Adrian. Adrian is a fantastic name!

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Pucey
[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-12 09:20 pm UTC (link)
Desdemona is not cliched in the least. Well, she wasn't supposed to be in the beginning. Perhaps by this point she is, considering she's become a demonic being (so to speak). I hadn't originally planned that for her. It just fell into place once I had thought up Adrian...

And, unfortunately, I won't keep his name as it originally was. People might start to think I see myself as the main character!

I never even wrote about the 'relationship' between the two! It's just be far too weird to keep it as Adrian. Especially when Des becomes his fiance and finds him in bed with her sister! Just the mere idea of keeping the name makes me shudder!

No. No good would come of that. Especially if I continue with how I had things written out. He haunts her through the ages, once she's able to escape, causing her to go insane.

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Astoria
[info]ttw_pucey
2009-06-12 10:10 pm UTC (link)
Interesting.

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Pucey
[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-13 08:27 am UTC (link)
And there I go. I said too much. Or, too little, considering I crossed so much of it out.

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Astoria
[info]ttw_pucey
2009-06-13 08:28 am UTC (link)
No. Not this time.

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Pucey
[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-13 08:31 am UTC (link)
How so?

Anyway, there, you've seen something that I've written. Happy now?

I'm just shocked I didn't hear more of the "you're an idiot" comments!

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Astoria
[info]ttw_pucey
2009-06-13 08:32 am UTC (link)
You didn't deserve what I did.

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Adrian
[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-13 08:34 am UTC (link)
I... Where in the world did that come from?!

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Astoria
[info]ttw_pucey
2009-06-13 08:34 am UTC (link)
I've just been thinking.

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Adrian
[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-13 08:36 am UTC (link)
A dangerous past time...

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Astoria
[info]ttw_pucey
2009-06-13 08:36 am UTC (link)
Undoubtedly.

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Adrian
[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-13 08:46 am UTC (link)
We've gone down this path before. I know I didn't deserve it. In a week you'll be back to using it against me.

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Astoria
[info]ttw_pucey
2009-06-13 08:47 am UTC (link)
That's always a possibility.

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Adrian
[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-13 08:50 am UTC (link)
Then why keep saying it? You don't mean it, and as much as I appreciate the attempt, I'm tired...

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Astoria
[info]ttw_pucey
2009-06-13 08:51 am UTC (link)
Brutal honesty. I'm trying it out.

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Adrian
[info]ttw_astoria
2009-06-13 08:56 am UTC (link)
I don't know what to say to that...

Good to know. I guess there's always time for self improvement.

I guess I should thank you. For getting Ginny out of there. I know its a little late in coming, but that was a good thing you did.

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Astoria
[info]ttw_pucey
2009-06-13 09:18 am UTC (link)
You're welcome. But you had reason to not mention it before.

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